09 读后续写:历险型(故事构造“三大套路”)-高考英语读后续写技巧与训练

读后续写：历险型

Part1：经典例文（森林遇险） ................................................................................................................... 1

Part2：历险类细节描写 .............................................................................................................................. 3

①海上遇难 ......................................................................................................................................... 3

②洪水 ................................................................................................................................................ 5

③地震 ................................................................................................................................................ 5

④火灾 ................................................................................................................................................ 5

⑤受伤 ................................................................................................................................................ 6

⑥丛林逃生 ......................................................................................................................................... 7

Part3：历险类故事构造“三大套路” ........................................................................................................ 8

套路一：恶劣环境要烘托 .................................................................................................................... 8

套路二：转折思维技巧好 .................................................................................................................... 8

套路三：万能升华要牢记 .................................................................................................................... 9

Part4：灵活应用 ....................................................................................................................................... 10

例1：山洞遇险 ................................................................................................................................. 10

Part5：高考真题再现 ................................................................................................................................ 12

真题1：爸爸与我森林遇险【2018年6月浙江卷】 .......................................................................... 12

真题2：旅游途中遇狼【2017年6月浙江卷】 ................................................................................. 14

Part1：经典例文（森林遇险）

Brady was a recently retired search and rescue was not happy and missed his owner Al because

Al had gone out on a rescue mission without him. Al’s nephew Steve took Brady along when he and his

friend Zach went on a overnight hike. But suddenly Steve and Zach smelled something burning and they

realized that lightning had set the woods on -blown flame had leaped from the top of one tree to

another. The long dry summer had turned the forest into a tinderbox(火绒箱) and the thunderstorm wasn’t

helping much. It had more wind and lightning than rain. Zach pulled Steve’ s arm. “Let’s go! We can make it

back to the river we crossed today.” Steve pulled Brady’s leash（皮带） and their heads down against the

strong fire-wind, they hurried down the path they had followed earlier. The air was full of smoke，and pine

branches broke from burning trees with a crisp sound. Steve kept his eyes on the route. All they had to do

was to make it down to the river…

Brady barked a sharp warning. Ahead of them lay a dense curtain of smoke across the path. They’d

never make it through that. They would have to find another escape route. The dog was pulling at his leash

trying to draw them away from the smoke. This was what Brady was trained to do, and yet Steve was uneasy.

It seemed to him they were moving away from the river.

Brady lifted his head and smelled the smoky wind. Suddenly, the dog ran away and disappeared. The

boys yelled and shouted for him，but he didn’t come back.

They had no choice but to leave him behind. Heartsick, Steve and Zach went up a slope（斜坡）. He

couldn’t blame Brady for panicking and escaping. He himself wanted to run even though he didn’t have a

clue which hadn’t gone far when there was a familiar bark, and Brady came running toward him.

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1.所续写的短文词数应为150左右；

2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；

3.续写部分分为二段，每段的开头语已经为你写好；

4续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

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“Where’ve you been?” Steve cried.

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Brady led them back down the slope and into the trees.

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“Where've you been?"Steve cried Brady stopped directly in front of him and started pushing him back toward

the slope they’d just climbed. When Steve still didn’t get it, Brady grabbed the boy's jeans and pulled harder. The

message was clear, but Steve hesitated. Of course he remembered what his uncle had said about Brady saving his life,

but that had been a long time ago. Was he still sharp enough to get them through this? Brady pulled again,urgently,

“0K,big guy,”

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Brady led them back down the slope and into the trees. Several times the big dog stopped to get his escape route.

Often he changed direction. How long they’d walked Steve had no idea. He just held onto Brady’s leash with one

hand and kept putting one foot in front of the other. He was almost numb when he heard the wonderful sound of

rushing water. The river! With a yell the boys ran unsteadily forward until they jumped in cool,running water. “Brady,

you did it!”

第1段：

“你去哪儿了？ 史蒂夫叫道，布雷迪直接停在他面前，开始把他推回他们刚爬上去的斜坡。 当史蒂夫仍然没有得到它，布雷迪抓住男孩的牛仔裤，并拉得更用力。 信息很清楚，但史蒂夫犹豫了。 他当然记得他叔叔说过布雷迪救他的命，但那是很久以前的事了。 他还能让他们度过难关吗？ 布雷迪又紧急地拉了一下，“0K，大个子，”史蒂夫决定......

第2段：

布雷迪带领他们回到斜坡上，进入树林。 这只大狗停了好几次，以获得他的逃跑路线。 他经常改变方向。 他们走了多久，史蒂夫不知道。 他只是用一只手抓住布雷迪的皮带，继续把一只脚放在另一只前面。 听到哗哗的水声，他几乎麻木了。 河流！ 孩子们大喊一声，摇摇晃晃地向前跑，直到他们跳进凉爽的流水里。

“布雷迪，你做到了！”

Part2：历险类细节描写

①海上遇难

天气

*The sky is darkened with gloomy clouds. Lighting flashed across the sky, followed by a clap of thunder. Minutes

later, there came a downpour.

*The wind was howling and the waves smacked repeatedly against her face.

海上

*The sea boiled in the storm.

*The angry waves crashed against the side of the boat, with water splashing here and there.

船

*Leaned sideways

*The ship was rocking up and down in the restless sea.

*The crashing waves filled their boat with water faster than they could empty it.

救援人

*But then, as I looked in the distance, I discovered a series of three or four big waves heading towards the shore.

*Without thinking, I ran down into the street, holding my body board on the way and shouted at a stranger to call the

police.

*Patting their faces to wake them up, I continuously told them to be strong.

遇难者

*She calmed down to keep the rhyme of breathing so that she could breathe evenly.

*I felt extremely exhausted（apparently worn-out）

*Looking at the vast sea, I felt a sense of fear surging through my whole body.

*Salt stinging my eyes, I could hardly tell how long I could hold on.

*But I still shouted in my head: keep on.

*He saw an airplane flying overhead. But with no flashlight, he was invisible in the vast ocean.

*He took off his yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flagged them if they came back.

*In sheer desperation, I finally caught sight of some boats with lifeguards on them heading towards us. Thank you,

lord.

*Quite soon, I felt strong arms pull me out of the sea onto the board.

(摘自杭二中参考答案)

救援过程

*Then he dragged her upper from the water,.

救人未遂

*He held her hand tightly but a huge wave separated them.

*He fought the waves and strove to catch her, but failed, she was drifted away.

其他

*Energy returning magically, he rose to his feet and took immediate action.

*They waved the flag and screamed for help.

*Bear Grylls caught sight of the shabby boat and two men in rags.

*They were taken on board and thanked Edward over and over again.

*From them on, he made up his mind never to take any risks unless he could ensure tight safety. Because it was

simply his stubborn conducts and his

②洪水

*The water kept rising. Two hours passed. He did not dare to move an inch for fear of slipping.

*Another two hours later, he noticed that the water level went down enough that he could try an escape.

*Stiff from keeping in one position for hours, he slowly unfolded his bodies.

*Cautiously and steadily, he made his way forward to the entrance.

③地震

*Deep cracks opened up in the streets.

*The wall caved in.

*Huge buildings collapsed, sending clouds of dust into the air.

*The animals grew restless as if in anticipation of a disaster.

④火灾

屋子

*Fanned by the wind, the house was bathed in an immense stream of flames.

*The house was bathed in an immense stream of flames.

*The roaring fire swallowed the whole house.

烟

*Dense smoke swirled and billowed and the fumes made her choke for a moment.

*The thick smoke caused him to stumble blindly around, burned his eyes, and made it impossible to breathe.

人的反应

*Through the office door, she saw flames climbing up the wall.

*Both of them were coughing and their eyes were stinging.

*She clung to her, terrified by the leaping flames.

*Turning, he fought through the smoke and ran out of the house.

*Shielding her noise from the smoke, she prompted him to run for safety.

*When he opened the front door of their flat to investigate, a thick cloud of smoke greeted him.

*By then, with their mouths choked with smoke, both of them feel the heat engulfing everything.

⑤受伤

*She turned around, only to find Tim beaten to the ground in extreme danger.

*Afraid and merely desperate, she rushed towards him.

*With all her strength, she instantly seated him onto the car.

*He pulled her towards him with full strength.

*Her body was limp and she was not breathing.

*He scooped her into his arms and struggled to feet.

伤情

*He was attacked violently and covered with scratches.

*There was a trickle of blood from the wound.

治疗

*She applies a clean towel to the wound and press firmly on it to stop the bleeding.

*Wash and stitched the wound

*Apply some medicine to his wound

⑥丛林逃生

意识到不见了

*He scanned around the forest for her. “Eurus?” he shouted again.

*her heart dropped as he realized that she was gone.

*he spared no effort to find her, but it was all in vain.

*Thinking back to all of the good times that he had shared with her, he realized that he loved her and he wanted

nothing more than for her to come back.

逃生

*He tried to get on faster, but he could not find the way out of the bush.

*He was getting tired because Ceil was too heavy to carry for a young boy.

*At last he came into an open space with a large pool in the middle.

*He quickly soaked his clothes, for the approaching smoke could choke them.

救援

*He immediately ran out for searching, sb running after him.

*My poor children, the flame could have burnt them to death.’ thought sb desperately.

*While they walked on without hope, there came a sweet voice. ”Dad!”it was from sb.

*Sb jumped with joy and hugged his kids.

*She could hear water tricking somewhere at a distance.

Part3：历险类故事构造“三大套路”

套路一：恶劣环境要烘托

1. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats， got on our horses， and headed slowly towards

the mountains（慢慢地向山走去）. （17年11月浙江高考 ）

2. Never had I seen such a lovely creature in my life, so I followed its track without thinking twice（不假思索地追随它的足迹）.（17年11月浙江高考 ）

3. In the process of seeking for it, I was totally immersed in the charm of nature（完全沉浸在大自然的魅力中）. （17年11月浙江高考 ）

4. What's worse, he didn't have any food or water with him, let alone his cell phone or other

supplies（更不要说他的手机和其他日用品）. （江苏省如皋中学2021届高三第一学期教学质量调研试）

5. We were in the middle of nowhere, wearing only underwear, with our supplies burnt into ashes（把我们的物品烧成灰烬）, including our cellphones. （湖北省宜昌市第二中学2021届高三起点考试英语试题）

套路二：转折思维技巧好

例如，故事中我们迷路了，正在想办法如何脱离困境。

Suddenly it occurred to us that we could keep to the track to guide us it was

getting darker and darker, thus making it increasingly difficult for us to make out the road.（突然我们想到我们可以坚持小路引导我们回去。但天色越来越暗，使我们走道路越来越困难。）

解析：这个例子属于“正”变“负”的模式。迷路后，想到了办法，属于“正向”，但是外在环境不允许：天色太晚。属于“负向”。

【素材积累】

1. Ultimately, we were back, safe and sound（安然无恙）. （17年11月浙江高考 ）

2. We jumped into the warm vehicle and the forester drove us to the ranger station（开车送我们去巡逻站）, where we were given clothes and were able to call our parents.（湖北省宜昌市第二中学2021届高三起点考试英语试题）

套路三：万能升华要牢记

需要牢记，历险类的文章不要无缘无故拔高主题，一般的主题词是“勇敢”、“克服困难”，当然还有一个万能的表达“这是一次难忘的经历”。

万能句1：

That day was so unforgettable that it would stay in my memory forever.

那天是如此难忘，它将永远留在我的记忆。

遇到危险并且最终成功脱险的经历，想必对我们每个人来说一定是一生中难忘的经历。所以这个句子使用的场合还是挺多的。句子中使用了so...that的句式结构：如此......以至于。unforgettable是一个形容词，表示“无法忘记的”。

万能句2：

Only then did I realize that it was bravery that can conquer whatever difficulty came in the way.

直到那时，我才意识到，正是勇敢才能克服一切困难。

遇到危险后，勇敢面对，才能解决问题。这个句子突出了“勇敢”这个核心，这在“脱险型”的故事里，是非常恰当的。这句话使用了倒装的结构和强调结构结合的方式，也属于高分亮点句。

【素材积累】

1. Sitting in the guestroom, I found it really blissful to be accompanied by our beloved ones（有我们所爱的人陪伴真的很幸福）.（17年11月浙江高考 ）

2. Despite feeling weak, Nicholas was generally in a good condition,and he was really happy as he

was carried back to the ski resort to reunite with his family（和他的家人团聚）.（江苏省如皋中学2021届高三第一学期教学质量调研试）

our van chugged((发动机缓慢运转时)发出突突声) down the freeway, I thought this trip

might not be so bad after all. Good-bye, regular old summer vacation. Hello…Trip of a Lifetime（一生一次的旅程）?（2021.03 十校联盟续写讲评）

Part4：灵活应用

例1：山洞遇险

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Two months ago, my friend Lisa, Harry and I, planned to do something adventurous, so we

decided to explore a deep cave in the outskirt of our city with some food, water, torches and most

importantly our cell phones. But things were not going well. We could not find any vehicle to drop

us there. At long last, we managed to find a taxi which took us to the outskirt of the city. Another

evidence of bad luck was that Harry had left his cell phone at home.

After we got out of the taxi, some of the locals told us the way to the cave. The cave looked

very attractive yet still mysterious: the cave was so dark, and the tiny sounds made by the insects

and animals could be heard properly, pulling us into the cave with some unknown supernatural

power. As we were moving forward we made marks on the rocks along our path to remind us of the

exit of the cave. And we always kept our mobiles in switch on mode to contact each other in case we

got separated and even worse, lost in the cave.

As we were moving forward, Harry felt that somebody was following our footsteps but he left

his intuition to a joke. When we reached in the deep of the cave, we lost our way and gradually the

fog spread everywhere and we were not able to see each other properly. All of us got very scared of

what was happening around us. Suddenly, we noticed that Harry was not with us and then we

vaguely heard a shout from the depth of the cave and we thought it was Harry, so we started

searching for him. But our torches were left no use in such thick fog.

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So we groped our way towards the direction of the shout.

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After we reunited with Harry, we tried to find the way out.

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【答案】So we groped our way towards the direction of the shout. Frightened as we were, we still

made up our mind to search for Harry. Hardly can we see anything in the completely dark situation,

so we had to feel our way to search Harry with all strength. Slowly and cautiously moving forward,

we held our hands tightly in order not to be separated. With the voice approaching, we realized we

would meet Harry immediately. Fortunately, when finding Harry sitting on the ground, we sighed

with a relief.

After we reunited with Harry, we tried to find the way out. Without hesitation, we decided to

hunt for these marks which we had made before. “I get it!” Harry screamed. Looking up quickly, we

found these clear marks easily. It was with the help of these marks that we quickly found the exit.

When walking out of the cave, we knew we were saved. From this experience, what we learnt was

that it was dangerous to explore the unknown word without a fully detailed plan.

【解析】

【分析】

本文是一篇记叙文，讲述了作者和小伙伴们一起去探索一个位于城市郊区的山洞。山洞里面太黑又有雾，所以Harry和我们走散了。当听到Harry的呼救后，我们一起找到了Harry，最终逃离了山洞。

【详解】1.段落续写：

①由第一段首句内容“所以我们摸索着朝着呼喊的方向走去。”可知，第一段可描写我们是如何在山洞中寻找Harry的。

②由第二段首句内容“我们和Harry重逢后，我们试图找到出路。”可知，第二段可描写我们利用之前所做的记号逃离山洞的过程。

2.续写线索：听到声音——寻找Harry——找到Harry——寻找出口——逃离山洞——领悟感受

3.

词类激活

行为类

①寻找：hunt for/search for/ find

②大叫：scream/cry

③接近：approach/draw near

情感类

①小心：cautious/ careful

②害怕：scared/ frightened

【点睛】[高分句型1]. Frightened as we were, we still made up our mind to search for Harry.(运用了as引导让步状语从句时的倒装结构)

[高分句型2]. Without hesitation, we decided to hunt for these marks which we had made before(运用了which引导的限制性定语从句)

[高分句型3]. It was with the help of these marks that we quickly found the exit.(运用了强结构)

Part5：高考真题再现

真题1：爸爸与我森林遇险【2018年6月浙江卷】

阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

It was summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to

take me on a trip to the Wild West.

We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached

Albuquerque in the late afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dad’s friend, picked us up from the airport and

drove us up to his farm in Pecos.

His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My

dad and I spent the night in the guestroom of the farm house listening to the frogs and water

rolling down the river nearby. Very early in the morning. Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast.

“The day starts at dawn on my farm,” he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the

chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze (吃草). I was

impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses. They looked really cool.

In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride, and he said yes, as long as

my dad went with me. I wasn’t going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put

on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains. “Don’t be

late for supper,” Uncle Paul cried, “and keep to the track so that you don’t get lost!” “OK!” my

dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight. It was so peaceful

and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternoon sun

mixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven (编织的) blanket spread out upon

the ground just for us.

注意：

1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；

3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；

4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

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Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.

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We had no idea where we were and it got dark.

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Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. Dad and I found it was so cute that

we decided to chase it. After a while, we were completely lost in the forest. There was nothing left

in our sight but the trees. “We may not be able to make it back to the farm house in time for

supper.” I thought to myself. After a series of fruitless attempts to find a way out, we felt hungry

and tired.

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We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark. We got stuck in the forest. And an

unexpected shower added to the difficulty of us in finding a way home, for all the tracks we had

made disappeared because of the rain. I was almost on the edge of breaking down when my father

said, “Don’t worry, my son. I remember there is a river near the farm house. Find the river and we

will be back home.” Finally, we found the river and got back to the house along it. Needless to say,

we ate a late dinner.

真题2：旅游途中遇狼【2017年6月浙江卷】

第二节 读后续写（满分25分）

阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

On a bright, warm July afternoon, Mac Hollan, a primary school teacher, was cycling from

his home to Alaska with his friends. One of his friends had stopped to make a bicycle repair, but

they had encouraged Mac to carry on, and they would catch up with him soon. As Mac pedaled

(骑行) along alone, he thought fondly of his wife and two young daughters at home. He hoped to

show them this beautiful place someday.

Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him. “Man, that’s a big dog!” he thought.

But when he looked to the side, he saw instantly that it wasn’t a dog at all, but a wolf, quickly

catching up with him.

Mac’s heart jumped. He found out his can of bear spray. With one hand on the bars, he fired

the spray at the wolf. A bright red cloud enveloped the animal, and to Mac’s relief, it fell back,

shaking its head. But a minute later, it was by his side again. Then it attacked the back of Mac’s

bike, tearing open his tent bag. He fired at the wolf a second time, and again, it fell back only to

quickly restart the chase (追赶).

Mac was pedaling hard now. He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful not to slow

down. He saw a steep uphill climb before him. He knew that once he hit the hill, he’d be easy

caught up and the wolf’s teeth would be tearing into his flesh.

At this moment, Paul and Becky were driving their car on their way to Alaska. They didn’t

think much of it when they saw two cyclists repairing their bike on the side of the road. A bit later,

they spotted what they, too, assumed was a dog running alongside a man on a bike. As they got

closer, they realized that the dog was a wolf. Mac heard a large vehicle behind him. He pulled in

front of it as the wolf was catching up fast, just a dozen yards away now.

注意：

1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；

3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；

4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

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The car abrubtly stopped in front of him.

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A few minutes later,the other two cyclists arrived.

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The car abruptly stopped in front of him. Mac jumped off his bicycle and rushed to the door

of the car. But before Mac could open the door, the wolf had caught up and jumped to attack.

Luckily, the magic spray saved Mac a third time. Seeing the wolf back off, Paul quickly unlocked

the door, and the frightened man climbed into the car in no time, shutting the door behind him

heavily. Becky looked out of the back window and saw the wolf standing over Mac’s bicycle as if

it were a kill. Soon after, the animal ran off.

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A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived. Mac got out of the car and hugged his

friends. “It was really a nightmare and I thought I was going to die,” said Mac in a shaky voice,

tears gathering in his eyes. For him, life could never be more beautiful. After saying goodbye to

Paul and Becky with gratitude, the three men continued their trip, agreeing never to separate again.

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